Tuesday, October 4, 2016

Story: Anansi's Jealousy

Inside of a Jail Cell
Photo by: Aliven Sarkar found on Wiki

“Dad, why have I never met grandpa before?” Abioye asked.

“Well, son, your grandpa did some bad things a while ago and had to go away,” Kweku, Abioye’s father, responded.

“Like what kind of things? Where did he go? Is he ever coming back? Why did he have to…”Abioye was cut off by his father.

“Look, son, you’re not quite old enough to know these things. When the time is right…” Kewku was saying as Abioye interceded.

“Dad, I am thirteen years old. I am more than old enough to know. Please tell me,” Abioye said.

“Okay. I will tell you.” Kweku sighed with a feeling of defeat. Kweku then proceeded to tell the story of his father, Anansi.

Kweku started, “Your grandfather’s name is Anansi. He was born into a family with very little possessions. Your grandfather grew up in a small shack on the outskirts of this very town that we live in. He had a neighbor who was quite wealthy with a gigantic mansion and all sorts of possessions. Your grandfather did not like being poor and wished he was a part of the family next door. The neighbors had a son about the same age as Anansi. His name was Nothing.”

“His name was Nothing? That is an odd name,” Abioye interrupted.

“Yes, it is. Now, please do not interrupt me or I will stop the story,” Kweku said before continuing the story.

“Now Nothing did not show off his wealth to Anansi; instead, he befriended Anansi. The two grew up and remained friends, although they remained separated by wealth. One day, Anansi and Nothing decided it was time they both had wives. They set off for town with the intent to return with wives. On the road, Anansi began to worry that he would not find a good wife because he was poor. So, he tricked Nothing into switching clothes. He then lied to the townspeople, saying he was rich. Many women flocked to him, and he selected the best. Meanwhile, the only girl that would marry Nothing was a poor man’s daughter. When they returned home, your grandmother realized that your grandfather was in fact poor. She had been deceived, so she went next door to Nothing’s house. She refused to return home because she liked Nothing’s life more than your grandfather’s. This upset your grandfather, so he made a choice that would stick with him for the rest of his life. He murdered Nothing out of jealousy. What your grandfather didn’t realize was that your grandmother was pregnant with me at the time. The police found Nothing’s body and opened an investigation. Ultimately, they found your grandfather guilty, and he went to jail. He is still in jail to this day,” Kweku said.

“So, Grandpa killed someone?” Abioye asked.


“Yes. He killed his neighbor out of jealousy,” said Kweku. “The reason I have chosen to tell you this story is so that you can learn from it. Your grandfather did not like the family that he came from. He did not like the circumstances that he found himself in. Instead of working hard and saving money, he tried to cheat which ended in failure and jail.”

Author's Note:


The story of Anansi and Nothing is one of murder and jealousy. Anansi was a poor man who lived near a wealthy man by the name of Nothing. They went into town one day to find wives. On the road there, Anansi asked to wear Nothing’s robes for a while to feel what it is like to wear nice clothes. He agreed to return the robes before they reached town. Every time Nothing asked for them back, Anansi would make an excuse to keep them. When they reached town, Anansi found many wives because they thought he was rich. Nothing only found one wife, a daughter of a poor man. When they returned home with the wives, Anansi’s wives realized that Anansi was in fact poor. They struggled to find enough food, so Nothing’s wife invited them over for a feast. After the feast ended, the wives refused to return home to their poor lives. Anansi became jealous, so he devised a plan to kill Nothing. After Nothing’s death, Nothing’s wife went into town and gave yams to children, and in return the children mourned Nothing’s death with her. Now whenever you see a child crying, you will hear that they are “crying for nothing.” I chose to write my story very closely to the original, but from the point of view of Anansi’s child and grandchild. I kept with the theme of my previous stories and my project, a theme of overcoming your past to succeed. In my previous stories, my characters work hard to overcome their terrible pasts to succeed in life. In contrast, Anansi decides he wants to cheat and trick his way out of being poor. This short cut to success ends up being his downfall unlike my other characters. 

Bibliography:
West African Folktales by William H. Barker and Cecilia Sinclair, with drawings by Cecilia Sinclair (1917). Link

9 comments:

  1. Hey Tim, great spin on the Anansi and Nothing story. I really like how you retold it as a story being passed down from a father to his son. I see that you made Anansi pay for the deception much worse than he did in the story as well. I look forward to reading more of your stories.

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  2. Hey Tim, I have never read the original story before so I didn’t know the original story line. After reading your author’s note I think you did a great job on changing up the story. I think that it was a good idea for the father to pass the story down to his son. Every kid should know their family. This is also a learning lesson that can be passed down from generation to generation. I wonder what would have happen if instead of Anansi’s killing nothing he decided to kidnap him? I think it would be a change to the story that could also be a learning experience. His grandpa would still more than likely would have had to go to jail because of it but then the story could change from the dad telling the story to the grandpa telling his grandson of lessons that he had learned from when he was younger. It also should teach people to appreciate what you have no matter what situation that you are in. I enjoyed your story and think that you did a great job! I can’t wait to read more of your stories!

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  3. Great story!! Your writing was very clear and precise and that you give good detail. I also think it is something we can all relate to because everyone wants to know stories about their ancestors. I also think that the lesson told is very important. Jealousy is something everyone struggles with at some point in their life and it is something people need to learn how to get over. If not, it can lead to destructive things, such as murder in this case. Great story, I look forward to reading more in the future!

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  4. Tim,

    This adaptation to the story is brilliant. 5 stars all around for your ability to tell this story the way you have.

    Wow~
    The dialogue in this story is so well done. I really find stories with good dialogue to have a very captivating appeal.

    I wonder~
    I wonder if there would be a way to tell this story using a different type of writing style. Maybe from the perspective of just the boy? Just to decrease the amount of quotations and to allow the reader to connect better with one character.

    What if~
    The only "what if" I have was kind of mentioned in my I wonder. I don't want you to take anything away from the story, but maybe find a better way to format it so that it is not so quoted.

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  5. Hi Tim,

    Wow, this story was incredible! I really loved it. I have not read the original, but based off of your Author’s Note it seems like you did a great job retelling it. Nothing’s death made me so sad, I wish the grandfather did not kill him out of jealousy. I think it was really cool how you put it in the grandson’s perspective. I always love when the twist has something to do with how the story is told. Having the father tell the story to his son was really fun to imagine! It adds a bit of flair to the story, while also staying true to the original. Your whole storybook is fantastic! I remember reading a few of your stories earlier in the semester. You are doing an amazing job! You have a really great writing style. It keeps the reader intrigued and also does an awesome job of describing the setting. So close to being done!

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  6. Great writing, Tim!
    This story was very original and left me wanting it to be longer so I could spend more time with the characters!
    I love a good murder mystery and so having a concept like that included drew me even more into the story.
    I've read a lot of your stories and love your writing style. It is very consistent and smooth. There are always lots of details that make me enjoy them even more! Well done

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  7. Tim,

    This was a really fun piece to read! Having also read Anansi's stories, this was a treat to read someone's retelling of such an interesting folktale. I have to say, after reading other stories of yours, your writing is so consistent and the pacing of them is so good. In creative writing, I think that pacing is one of the hardest things to master and every time I have read one of your stories I feel like I am getting a complete beginning, middle and end that flows seamlessly together. This story was no different and I really enjoyed it overall. Great Job!

    Belle

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  8. This was such a great read. Your writing style was very easy to read and follow. I liked how you kept pretty close to the original story but added your own twist by having a dad tell his son the story. I never would have expected for Nothing to be shot.. That just goes to show you greed can make people do some crazy things! Nice work!

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  9. Tim,
    I haven't had the chance to read any of your storybook previously, so I wanted to see what your storybook was about! I enjoyed reading your stories and the renditions you created based on the original myths; however, I have a suggestion:
    I think it would be beneficial to extend your story and have a better balance between dialogue and the story itself. It is important to describe what is going on, and I felt like I was kind of thrown into a situation I was unfamiliar with. With that said, I did enjoy your stories and can't wait to read more!

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